Fox

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My guesses are Newl, Newt, Merriam or Mendel

Updated for Lucchese 2026. Going to start doing the rounds, so be prepared.

Okay, understood... but what you've done there is confirm that your faction intends to be exactly like everyone elses bar the contracts part. IMO you need more original RP ideas

Was asked to drop an in-depth review on this one. +1 with consideration Pro - Good play time - Enjoyed the layout of the backstory and enjoyed reading the backstory. - Well written and easy to understand. - I like the diversity Con - I found your actual forum post a bit hard to read because it's a solid wall of text, I think if you either broke it down or moved it into a G doc it would be easier to read. - You repeat yourself a bit too much talking about the organization of the faction rather than giving us actual unique RP ideas. - This is a soft con, your whole faction idea revolves around doing PKs as contracts - everybody in a faction wants to do PKs, it's one of the most fun things to do... You need to explain why a faction would go through you guys rather than give it to one of their guys for RP enrichment. Saying 'we're professional killers' isn't enough for me. Advice - I think for fun RP you should do what I call 'demi-kills' essentially giving your lower guys a kill contract and have one of your other guys swap to an alt so they can kill them *safely* with some good RP ops. Will definitely help if there are no actual 'contracts' to keep people entertained. - I think all in all, for me personally I'd need to understand what do you intend to do if nobody wants to hire you for PKs.

-1 Con - Your application is a mess, the grammar, spelling and lack of spaces is making it hard to read - Low playtime - You make a bunch of references to a 'discotecas'. I read the whole paragaraph and I still don't know what that is. - In your 'unique' RP, you wrote a bunch of words that all equate to 'wear nice clothes', 'smoke and sell cigars', there is nothing unique here. - Your 'unique event' doesn't give me anything to go on, it's all been done before. - The main problem I have here is that your backstory looks to have massive AI portions, it's quite obvious to tell and the writing style in your backstory doesn't match that of your forum post. If you look at 'They controlled Bogotá, Medellín, Cali, and most of Colombia’s southern, central, and northern regions—though not all. They had access to intelligence and networks that other syndicates couldn’t even approach. ' Compared to 'The Day They Killed Elias Developed Like A normal morning Elias Had A drinking Problem He always drank everywhere he had a business meeting he was on a helicopter the people with him were allied and knew what was gonna happen they knew dario was gonna kill him so Dario and Flaco went to another building near where the helicopter' It's extremely obvious. People work extremely hard on their applications and put real man hours into it. You appear to have chosen the easy route. Whilst I appreciate english may not be your first language, potentially - you could've had someone proof read it and make edits for you. Pro - The idea might be good, but you need to take this advice away and come back again IMO. Advice - Rewrite your entire story yourself, dont just do it really quick, take some time on it. - Have someone proof read it so that it makes sense. - DITCH AI. - Come up with some unique roleplay ideas that relate to your faction idea.

Simps

You didn't even try with this one, I'm not even gonna waste my time giving you constructive criticism.

Joy Division

-1 PRO - I like the application style, in that it is supposed to be a sort of FBI terminal. I however think you could've pushed it a bit further and made it look even more like a terminal. - I liked the backstory at times. CON - Struggled to read this story at times. In one paragraph you use 'Giovanni’s men' 4 times. - There is way too many names in here, you lose track very easy. - If this is supposed to be an FBI terminal, why does it read like a story book? pick one format. - You said it yourself. There are already a bunch of Italian families. You claim you want to do things differently, but give NO examples whatsoever. - You havent played since '24 and have just got back on. It's very unlikely you have actually played much since then. So the idea of 'I want to do something different than the other italian families, is kind of null because you haven't even had a chance to see what they're doing. - 6 days of playtime in 2 years isn't enough to run a faction, especially an Italian one. - The way your paragraph's are laid out, made it feel like a wall of text.

Faction was added before you even played the server. Ran for two years, in that time we owned 3 store fronts (pre map change), the club and the motel. Lil bro has no idea what he's talking about lmaoo

Get back to grinding bricks for the Don You go to work in the dark and you go home in the fucking dark

I mean, there's nothing stopping you from having conflict RP with another faction other than your own limitations. You have some drama with another factions? send some dudes down to their business and cause trouble. Drive by and shoot at the building / windows, making escalations get more heated to initiate sit downs etc. Nobody is stopping you from doing this, other than y'all being wimps.

-1 Lackluster application that doesn't really make sense. IMO you had the chance to do something quite unique and kind of flopped it. PRO - I see what you're trying to do, and I'll give props where it's due. - Decent enough RP ideas. Not sure if they'll pan out the way you're expecting though - Decent enough play time. CON - Togna Bologna is a dumb name and I can't take it seriously. - Your backstory is an absolute mess. What are you, a charitable organisation, a cult, a criminal enterprise... your backstory does not explain this at all. There are parts of it that dont make sense, you even spelled your characters name wrong at one point. You also mention 'the home' 11 times and 'the hand' 7 times - The cult idea is entirely lost. A cult isn't a brotherhood of individuals trying to make a city better, it's a fanatical group which usually has an eccentric leader who controls the people below him, you are not describing this in your backstory. - If you're a cult I want to know outright what your rank is, Supreme Leader, Grand Master? this should be absolutely pivotal to your backstory, and how your character rose to that rank and or gave himself the rank. - I hate this idea of 'we're going to clean up the city by locking up buildings and making sure places are protected, people will consider you a nuisance. - You call yourself the 'Hand of Paimon' but make no link to what 'Paimon' is? IMO (take these suggestions with a pinch of salt.) - You should really play into the cult idea and really go full hog with it, become fanatics who believe some mad shit, like you (the faction leader) are an actual descendent of God, and the people in your factions are disciples. - Whilst I said I hate the 'clean up the city' stuff, I do understand why you included it... IMO you should flip that too and instead of cleaning up the city, be the ones that are causing the damage. 'The Lucchese's are none-believers... we will show them no mercy'. There is no fear in the city anymore, a full blown heel faction of cultists could change that