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2 days of playtime?

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Not a bad application but definitely things to consider.

 

PRO

- Different ethnicity

- Loved the backstory, (could be more but it was an enjoyable read)

 

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- Low playtime. It seems you have some sort of grasp on what is required to be a faction leader, but i'd still recommend getting some more time under your belt.

- Some of the RP ideas you wrote down seem to be quite generic, could do with being padded out a little and given more explanation

- The use of words like storyline and ' Now they're in Liberty City' make me wonder if you wrote this for a FiveM server and have copied and pasted it

- You make multiple references to cocaine, when in all likelihood if you got accepted, you wouldn't get the cocaine racket.

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The lack of playtime is worrying and the base of the faction is very niche, I do not think it would be very successful.

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Palestinian faction? Oh shit here we go again...

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User has not logged on in over 2 weeks.

 

Thank you for applying for a faction.
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